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Wow..well I think this was an awesome read ...kind of a sci-fi /supernatural love story, but so much more! Greatly Enjoyed! ...well done :) donna

silver white gown and with the peril of some time sabataging the same vows only to be renewed.To write a poem using the phonix I think this sets a mark.It must have the same element and you have done that well here.'Stained Glass Eyes' In ink, David

born in the light of the Phoenix, with eroticism, greed and sin, lovely! :) Patrick/AO

Quietly we rose from our ashen dreams Faithfully we waited on hope’s sign As the Passeri sang for us I love this - great imagery, great flow, great story, told with a beautiful lyrical voice. I am becoming a fan Emarie - this is one of your best so far. Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.

I am no lover of form and rhyme. Lovely thoughts put together with life and truth are just plainly fascinating. You have definitely archived wonders in your write, but the power in sadness it too great to bear. Lol another plus point I think. May you write on to better even this write.

A beautiful piece here. I truly enjoyed reading it, savoring every line~ "There's no trick to being a humorist when you have the whole government working for you." Will Rogers

Wonderful write here. Almost like floating on clouds of ecstasy and to crash burned to ashes afterward, to rise again. I never use the word sci-fi as I am old school and that is reserved for grade b or worse film and writing, but it has a science fiction/fantasy type feel to it and was extremely riveting to me. Well done! Respectfully, Rett: "We can all be thankful that Picasso wasn't a plastic surgeon." Rett

A very well developed and focused metaphor. The detail is stunning, creating a parallel of real life and fantasy. The continuous cycling of life comes through at first vaguely, but then emphasized in the last stanza. The development of both your relationship and your person are very well depicted in the Icarus image. I note the placing of yourself in the position of Icarus and your loved one in the role of the father and mentor of Icarus. This adds so much depth to the description. It is, of course, a relief to see the Phoenix rising rather than the ending of poor Icarus, but in that combination are the alternatives that befall so many. Wonderful poem. John

T.L.Blue., This is a dynamite write. You combine bits of Flight of the Phoenix, and Icarus, in a legend form, detailed like science fiction, and tragic, yet you still see through stained glass eyes as he hands you the world. It's a brilliant piece. wcw

Dear Emarie, and the phoenix I am arisen in the sun moonshadows followed we we gone, gaté, gaté, gaté Beautiful heart-wrenching poem. I esp. loved the same lines wcw... ....we are all married in the spirit, yes? Love. ~A "We have to try to get rid of the notion of time. And when you have an intense contact of love with nature or another human being, like a spark, then you understand that there is no time and that everything is eternal." Paulo Coelho

Ooh, this was delicious for me, a lovely treat of queried imagery, open to such rich interpretation & yet so endowed with sensation & symbolism. I felt I was able to journey really fluidly within the construction & yes I loved the cyclical sense of it... as life is. Great stuff (& forgive me for saying this, but I think you should think of becoming a portrait model... Your image makes me want to get out the oil paints, evoking both a strong sense of water nymphs & such, from preraphaelite paintings & a desire to portray Morgana Le faye (Arthurian legends... not in the evil portrayal.. if you read "The mists of Avalon" she has far more credibility). Anni I wish to walk gracefully..... so as not to spill water.

and i'll use this word only one more time, i promise--*surreal* piece! if my interpretation is right, you are reborn in the Phoenix's love, which consists of mostly pagan propensities: greed, avarice, and craving. I would have given my right arm to have written this line: Beating a dusty amethyst rhythm/As my soul he graced, so pure.." Dusty amethyst rhythm! Awesome. GB

i thought it was very dark but i saw a briliant light as well good read i say

Emarie, congratulations. It's a good thing to be published. And sad that in order to do so, we must delete our works. Blessings. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha