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paul
paul
Nov 24, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Perfect World

From mind to mind Let us try to find A common ground With a sweet sound The sweetest scent Seems to be god sent A place where pain ignores The perfect world everyone adores No need to take happy pills From crowded window sills No shrinks telling you lies The clearest of earthly skies A feeling of peace and tranquility No need for chemical stability A life full of joy and happy days Pain won’t know of these ways
— paul, Nov 24, 2007

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Region, Country: New York, USA

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btflmourning

18 years 6 months ago

Good Job!

i love the ending of the poem. It made it all flow smoothly and meaningfully.
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dmcmsc000

18 years 6 months ago

My Critique

Very nice...Sounds like it could affect quite a few readers..."A feeling of peace and tranquility No need for chemical stability" Perhaps this should be given to those who feel the need to medicate their lives...Nicely done great job!
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

Common ground

harmony,being on the same page and not arguing over the book.To think outside the box together. Sounds good who is buying coffee(I got the first round of tea). In ink, David
andrew

andrew

18 years 6 months ago

Update

This poem was accidentally posted in my name -- it was actually authored by Paul.
Mark

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

I Do

Andrew, when was the last time you submitted poetry? (I mean in THIS sense Paul :-)