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Nov 23, 2007
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Violent waves
Have you ever surfed in violent ocean?
Gotten violated by a wild wave?
Held under struggling,
swimming for the surface amidst the turmoil.
Swam to the surface with your breath expiring
then found sand.
You swam the wrong way.
But you are alive.
We make it back,
just barely.
But back
Still here
Not sure why.
There is no god,
only life.
— weirdelf, Nov 23, 2007
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Critiques
Mark
18 years 6 months ago
I think the older we get
weirdelf
18 years 6 months ago
yep, upside down, like I was
IKnowNoBox
18 years 6 months ago
Then surly when we survive a pounding...
Mark
18 years 6 months ago
For sure David
weirdelf
18 years 6 months ago
the poem was a metaphor for the depression
Mark
18 years 6 months ago
Jess Check this out for inspiration
purplemoondoll
18 years 6 months ago
As a regular surfer and survivor
weirdelf
18 years 6 months ago
ta Kaz
purplemoondoll
18 years 6 months ago
I havent read it but will now
anonymitylll
18 years 6 months ago
Its like dipping through
weirdelf
18 years 6 months ago
Allthough it is very long you might appreciate my poem
docmaverick
18 years 6 months ago
Mr. elf...
IKnowNoBox
18 years 6 months ago
Doc as you see it with creation I can see it
docmaverick
18 years 6 months ago
in explaination...
docmaverick
18 years 6 months ago
I Tip My Hat...
IKnowNoBox
18 years 6 months ago
Then there is our common ground.
weirdelf
18 years 6 months ago
Have you seen my poem "The Wave" on this site?
dbrock
18 years 6 months ago
…just wondering when
weirdelf
18 years 6 months ago
I always feel better after a session on NeoPoet
Sinbadthesailorman
18 years 6 months ago
You swam the wrong way
IKnowNoBox
18 years 6 months ago
About a bang
weirdelf
18 years 6 months ago
One of my favourite Authors, Tom Robbins
IKnowNoBox
18 years 6 months ago
Tom Robbins Told me to Duck the Nonsense and see the After Math
RSScheerer
18 years ago
A great metaphor and one
weirdelf
18 years ago
swom, swam, swum, swim,
RSScheerer
18 years ago
You were supposed to enlighten me
RSScheerer
18 years ago
Well hell, no wonder
Barbara Writes
18 years ago
Hey Jess