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Polar Rose

POLAR ROSE   Your smile flutters, falters and fades, and your translucent eyelids turn dull as crumpled tissues as they crease tight closed: in a whisper a mere cough from a whimper you ask me to leave.   In a voice more fragile than moonbeams You murmur your sorrow and sinless blame: your rose is frozen, cup caged in curled fingers screened from sight. How so? Did a culmination of drear autumn chills bring this sad and silent stillness or maybe a flash-frozen wintry finger fast petrified this bloom.   I move your hand aside, cupped still, and note a sudden sharpness in your stance. You will not look with me upon the tight shut petals ice-bonded hard and stiff and though the colours softly bleed from blush to flame they are brittle, brittle and over-bright as though the slightest touch could crystallise and crumble or crack and bleed.   Watch. See how I cradle with two hands, gentle … gentle … and barely frame this blossom, bend, open my lips and ‘haaaaah’ my hot and humid breath across these frosty glacial contours, and ‘haaaah’ again and again to free to the very depth these captive polar convolutions and soften to silk and satin these rigid frigid whorls of pain.   It melts! It melts! Your eyelid’s flicker tells your joy. The gelid interstices dissolve to dew, the furls uncurl, open, bloom and, gasping, gape apart and give as gift a musk miasma.   My slightest kiss and lightest travelling tip of tongue Delves deep within the candid coral core: Ah, the taste, the scent, of surging seas And a jubilant sunlit summer rose.               

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purplemoondoll

18 years 5 months ago

Excellent Imagery

Welcome to the site. This is a beautifully crafted poem. I really enjoyed reading this. The images are crystal clear. The emotion and voices are felt and heard clearly too. I really like the way you have used the metaphor of the rose - it works really well. Excellent writing. I really look forward to seeing more of your work. This is a treat to read - thank you. :-) Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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meic

18 years 5 months ago

The metaphor was difficult

The metaphor was difficult ... floral to be sure, though 'rose' wasn't my first choice, however only a single syllable word would scan properly. Thank you so much. Mike
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DDCdogood

18 years 5 months ago

'In a voice more fragile than Moonbeams', Beautiful....

I guess I'm a purist, because this piece, leaped off the page at me. This is a fine example of diffinitive writing skills. I wasn't in the room with the writer, I was in the heart and mind, of this writer. Like a master painter, an artistry of 'Old school', word and story smithing. A fine read, and I bow to your level of work. This site has just been legitimatized 'Meic' Keep em' comin' 'Meic' Peace, DDC
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theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

I love how unworthy I feel sometimes...

I just thought I would revisit this and tell you again how much in love with your work I have fallen!!! I truely have not read poetry to match this...and even if that just my humble opinion...well at least its something!!! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
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meic

18 years 4 months ago

My work [being very

My work [being very discriminating and with impeccable taste] reciprocates of course. And your opinion is never humble to me, it is of immense value. ... and such a co-incidence! Yesterday I tried out a Christmas present [a digital voice recorder] and recorded a few of my poems as a try-out. Polar Rose was the first. Probably not the best time to attempt it since I'm still a bit 'breathy' from the flu - and I'm not too keen on the sound of my own voice! Thank you, sincerely Mike
theladyblue

theladyblue

18 years 4 months ago

Then it is humbly given...

and I can not imagine that your voice would ever be to a point that you could not conjure the magic that so inspires your words. After all, magic is as magic does and for you my friend it carries its weight! "For every shadow, no matter it's depth, is threatened by the morning's light..." <3 Emarie
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fthillsboomer

18 years 3 months ago

Amazing

At once intro and extra-spective. It's true then isn't it. All you damn Welshmen have romantic souls. You had me at "a voice more fragile than moonbeams."
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meic

18 years 3 months ago

Thank you … and I plead

Thank you ... and I plead guilty to the romantic charge! Mike "not all matterings of mind equal one violet" ~ e e cummings ~