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IKnowNoBox
Nov 17, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Miserably Sarcastic

 Woe is me oh

 I am a torn soul

torn Torn

between two worlds

one black

one gray

 

woe is me

a candle

a candle

in a storm

never enough light

to see the ground

upon which

are pieces of me

 

shattered I am shattered

and I can not embrace

life or anything new

for my hands are torn

torn and filled with

the jagged pieces of me

 

adrift I am adrift

through life

an empty vessel

that longs only to be

filled with melancholy

 

a draft haunts me

I am Haunted

By a Draft that

will not leave my candle

burn in my Dark corridor

with gray walls

where I lay in lament

surrounded by the

many pieces of me

— IKnowNoBox, Nov 17, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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TheRealTearsICry

18 years 6 months ago

...

"for my hands are torn torn and filled with the jagged pieces of me"..... wow, that is very deep.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

If we hold onto our jagged past.

Do we truly wish to be healed? We cannot embrace others if we are grasping our own miseries. It is healthy to carry a little piece of our shattered feelings but only as a reminder of how well we have healed. Some when they are deep in their misery,they let it define them.They hurt others attempt to console them,some abuse this and return even falsly to lament until some one tries to consoles them ...then when the person has real misery upon them they are without a comforter...sad really. In ink, Dabbler
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scandalous

18 years 6 months ago

woe,or whoa?

ehey there, i am following up on my word to read your pieces here... any luck on finding solace in your travels and any luck finding yourself in these times? (a heartfelt write) peace and love,jenn.
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dbrock

18 years 6 months ago

AWESOME!!! …i wanted to

AWESOME!!! ...i wanted to write that one! :) Enjoyed from start to finish...bravo. donna
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

I would like to read it....

how about Oh the angst I feel Feel my very life Sliping sliping away....lol some thing like that. Really I would like to read your take on this theme Donna. In ink, Dabbler
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purplemoondoll

18 years 6 months ago

One part of me

One part of me felt melancholy - I could really envisage you tearing your hair out and wringing your hands and the other smiled :-)I like the theme, its a different take, the repeats worked and I love the way you built the drama and sarcasm all the way - I could hear your screams of lament as I read! Nice work Dabbler! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 6 months ago

Your Review has me .....I am At I am at a loss

a loss of words Oh Doll ....Lol I would like to see a drama slam by you as well Kaz... how tragic simple tragic such a thing I have done Have I no compassion? for those in the throws of agony for those in the grip the grip of woe.Whoa I say Whoa ....lol I have done this routine in a pub.Really brings them out of their seats We flip hallmark cards around as well...but that is for a different time. In ink, Dabbler (the-damned-to-the-blackest-dark...lol)
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purplemoondoll

18 years 6 months ago

LMAO

Now that I would love to see. This reminds me of a girl I was at school with - drama queen - but we loved her because she was so entertaining and the teacher's couldnt handle it! Kaz It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.