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weirdelf
weirdelf
Nov 14, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Symptoms of testosterone, Part 3 – Immortality



Women only know for sure
Men make
make art
make empires
make monuments
or seduce
or  rape

or quietly accept our own ends

— weirdelf, Nov 14, 2007

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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whitetea

whitetea

18 years 6 months ago

The brevity in this is

The brevity in this is powerful... I'm going ahead and reading more of what you have, this caught my eye, and I continue to read this over and over. I think you really have it here, this is solid.
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 6 months ago

thank you whitetea

(your name could be Maori or very English!8) I have been a bit absent lately but will surely check out your works as well. cheers, Jess
Mark

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

mmmm this is poetry

Can meditate on this and this is my favorite kind of poetic experience. I love the first line a curveball thrown off the bat - nice
Mark

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

I don't think it a truism

The first line as I said is a curveball for me if you could mke it a bit less obscure? it might be more helpful in my grasping the whole. But you know me I need to see a fairly solid face value before I look deeper. Are you saying there that only women truly see men for what they are? Then, after I get by the first line I will love to continue here.
Mark

Mark

18 years 6 months ago

That's an excellent point David

this is a part and the context can be lost I think to take it alone. Going back and put the pieces together - me bad
S

sevenchild

18 years 6 months ago

I love simplicity

brewed with complex wine. Great work! ***Lovely am I*** Valene
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years ago

Not a truism

just a statement of acceptance, in my eyes. Whitney hit it perfectly with by pointing out its brevity. Volumes without many words, friend - leave the mind to wander its own pages. Best, Ronda