Polar Bear In peril

You address so well such timely, weighty matters. My hat's off to you. Regards, Chuck

to take a closer look at end-of-line syllables and first emergence into a new line. For example: The beat is consistent through the first stanza's Water, Water Everywhere Nowhere to rest But as to the last line, it abruptly doubles up adjoining accented syllables, as in Nowhere to rest For the polar bear Simply removing the unaccented "the" in this last line will throw the accent to the second-in-line syllable ... and be consistent with earlier (and later) patterns. That would be my remedy in this comment sampling of your piece. You may have a better twist. In the second stanza, I view Was his home Now the ocean has the same meter issue. To add "And" or "But" before the "now" supplies a handy fix in that case. Changes like I suggest I suspect will improve the rhythm and will make, I think, a more satisfactory harmony. Please remember my advice is free ... and might be worth as much. Frankly, I am more an observer than an authority on composing verse. More regards, Chuck PS: Look for more opportunities for harmony betterment in this piece. In the body of my comment here, please be advised, I merely sampled from your poem.

Frankly I enjoyed the dialogue between you and Chuck more than the poem. Listen to him, he is a man who truly understands the cadences and rhythms of our language more than most on this site. Some here rhyme, some count syllables, some make rhythm but almost none achieve all. Not even Chuck does all that all at once most of the time. We can strive to say something important, we can strive for all sorts of poetic structure, but many, many great poets have come before us. It's not a reason to be discouraged, but to watch and learn and listen. I respect you Michael, but you have got some watching, learning and listening to do. cheers, Jess