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The Girl in a Bottle

I found her there beside the ocean fair

Cold and motionless; in an antiquated black

Bikini

She was pale white and quite a sight to behold

Although she appeared alive she was most assuredly

Dead

What could have befallen this lovely creature?

Her hair was not golden or brown, but more a burnt auburn

She was of medium height; and such a delight to behold

Her frame was architecturally sound and well constructed

A lovely girl, bejeweled; with gold, gem stones and silver

She was picturesque

Beside her laid a mysterious jewel encrusted bottle

I picked it up and popped the top off

With a small and sudden pop

Came a meek, pink tempest, it raced about quite proficiently  

It encompassed her, lifting her body above the sand

The only movement was the whisking of her ponytail

As she started to whirl around and around

Then with an astounding "poof" the body, it was gone

And so was that bottle

I lighted down to the ground, and sat, and pondered

To what drink was I on, was it bad, was I mad?

or

Was this my Genie's burial?

A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man

— Sinbadthesailorman, Nov 09, 2007

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About the Author

Region, Country: U.S. A. Indiana, Valparaiso, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Walt Whitman, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, Carl Sandburg these I have read some And so Many More. I have no Favorite or any that I dislike. Whom I consider to be poets; of course there are many Dark and hateful souls, who would cry out and to I will lend an ear, but some. They just leave a awful taste in my heart that I can not bear to read twice. Let alone as many times I would do normally; as I must.

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barbsdad2003

18 years 7 months ago

I like how you ...

sort of wander free of conventional restraint in your writings. Intriguing. I think your strongest talent lies in your descriptions. More intriguing. There's a rich potential in these here hills. Yet more intriguing. Thanx for your sharings. Your mood(s) tear through your pieces in a flash-floodlike rush. In my book a commendable thing. Yours, Chuck
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 7 months ago

Thanx A hole lot

I truely am a beginner and wish to be so much more I have many obstcels to over come But I think I found a home in this site Thanx to all who have brought it from conception to it birth in who will undoubtly carry it through
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 7 months ago

Gentle lifed me of my seat then gave me the feeling like I

too did not know what I just saw/read,yet to really understand would be to take the feeling away from this poem which is impossible because the image is so clear once again i read your poem with the eye of a cinamatographer pan acrossed a beach to a person strolling then a close up as he bends to pick some thing up.... Thank you Sin Bad, Dabbler ps you may want to delete the duplacate to avoid spliting comments,I had the same glitch occur.
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 7 months ago

Thanx Dabbler

I been told by some that don't really read poetry because I shoves it into my friends faces ever time I get a chance that the would actually buy the stuff I been writing if I would print it But I thought they where spoofin me and humoring me And I still am not shure if I truely posses any real talent yet For I see them as mere releases of pit up emotions I still can't get rid of any for a price
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LadyTheresa

56 years 5 months ago

Hi Sailorman!

I enjoyed your poem, its style in unique and I thnk you should embrace your originality. I liked it for two reasons...firstly because I visualized a clear picture of this genie on the beach and your finding her and the bottle, etc. secondly because as you mentioned "for I see them as mere pit up emotions I still can't get rid of for any price." Spoken like a truly creative individual! I believe most works of art whether paintings, literature, music and your spoken word is derived from experiences/emotions that the artist feels deeply and/or strongly about so much that he/she must mainfest them into some artistic form of expression. So give yourself a big attaboy and just write! We all start from humble beginnings! Yours, LadyTheresa
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 1 month ago

Thanx so much

Genie was my ex's pet name and hers for me was Sinbad But I have yet to comitt too writing directly at her she is the bases of every thing I know think as I write well almost evrything but she seems to have found some kind of joy ca sa ra sa ra I guess I just whish it was as easy for me Donnie/ Sinbad thanxs Lady T
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poewriter58

18 years 4 months ago

Interesting

from the start of this poem you had my attention as Lady T said we all start humble. I see potential in your writing and will continue onto more of your work Chrys
Sinbadthesailorman

Sinbadthesailorman

18 years 1 month ago

Thanxs for the vote of cofiedence

I am so needy now a days Just when life starts to settle down it get all turn up side down Power goes off the 23rd and the head dispathcher at the company has die last week So I've been put back on the back burner again sort of speak because the new one is an old driver who knows every one esle but me and I can feel the favortizims starting all over again so I am growing weary of this J O B I see you have become very active here good for you hope to get resettled soon so I can start relearning Donnie/Sinbad