Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
The Girl in a Bottle
I found her there beside the ocean fair
Cold and motionless; in an antiquated black
Bikini
She was pale white and quite a sight to behold
Although she appeared alive she was most assuredly
Dead
What could have befallen this lovely creature?
Her hair was not golden or brown, but more a burnt auburn
She was of medium height; and such a delight to behold
Her frame was architecturally sound and well constructed
A lovely girl, bejeweled; with gold, gem stones and silver
She was picturesque
Beside her laid a mysterious jewel encrusted bottle
I picked it up and popped the top off
With a small and sudden pop
Came a meek, pink tempest, it raced about quite proficiently
It encompassed her, lifting her body above the sand
The only movement was the whisking of her ponytail
As she started to whirl around and around
Then with an astounding "poof" the body, it was gone
And so was that bottle
I lighted down to the ground, and sat, and pondered
To what drink was I on, was it bad, was I mad?
or
Was this my Genie's burial?
A thought by Sinbad the Sailor Man
Critiques
barbsdad2003
18 years 7 months ago
I like how you ...
Sinbadthesailorman
18 years 7 months ago
Thanx A hole lot
Sinbadthesailorman
18 years 7 months ago
Don't know why there is two copies
IKnowNoBox
18 years 7 months ago
Gentle lifed me of my seat then gave me the feeling like I
Sinbadthesailorman
18 years 7 months ago
Thanx Dabbler
LadyTheresa
56 years 5 months ago
Hi Sailorman!
Sinbadthesailorman
18 years 1 month ago
Thanx so much
poewriter58
18 years 4 months ago
Interesting
Sinbadthesailorman
18 years 1 month ago
Thanxs for the vote of cofiedence