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gold

gold

wherever you go, you bring evening.
hair moist with the soggy gold
of Sunday grass. Tired yawn
pulling in the wet cascade
of howling leaves in
the beating pulse of your
uncertain grasp,
your gently wounded hand--
i feel broken slivers of
the afternoon sun. Yellow shafts,
the light buttercup
a fading tissue glowing in
halved ochre on the bathroom
porcelain. Next to that spotty
mirror, which shows you
something different each evening.

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eric ashford

18 years 2 months ago

Yes I agree with the

Yes I agree with the above. I am browsing the back issues so to speak and happened upon this gem. Good poem! eric
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cricket

18 years 6 months ago

awesome

awesome write, really enjoyed the imagery with this write, really draws the reader in, I can somewhat relate to this write, well done.
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 6 months ago

You continue to impress and make me envious

with your wordcraftsmanship and awesomely evocative imagery. Everything works, all images reinforce each other and build delicately yet powerfully complex emotions. Stunning work. You bastard. cheers, Jess
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Lenny of Cohen

18 years 6 months ago

Bravo!!!

I agree with the praise already rightly heaped upon this majestic piece. Lenny
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barbsdad2003

18 years 6 months ago

a crafty word order and usage here

I'm supposing crafty can mean something like well crafted, can't it? That is what I mean. An example of what I like especially about this piece---and other of your works---lies in this choice of words and their order: halved ochre on the bathroom porcelain Thanx again, Chuck
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Vasyl Puzanov

18 years 4 months ago

Stunning!

Stunning! Cool poem!
dbaker

dbaker

18 years 3 months ago

Your Piece

Wow...that is a word you will not often hear or read coming from me. Awesome write. This piece falls into that category of "I wish like hell I had written this!" All my best. -DS Baker
themoonman

themoonman

18 years 3 months ago

Hi quill...

This has some wonderful images..very good. Deserves all the praises it has recieved and will get more I'm sure...
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 2 months ago

gold

As I read your work, I cannot possibly imagine what advice I may have to offer you! This is full of gorgeous imagery and perfect word choice to express each piece. ~ Ronda