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Pretty Broken (Acrostic)

banged up around the edge she seems a little silly some times

really it is a charm of hers,I kid you not the simple things she says

or the little phrases she uses so randomly,haphazardly scattered about

keeps me red faced for hours  with just the simplest  reply  unexpected

everything else she shares tells me she has been exposed to torment

now I see healing and confidence, a pretty girl on a country path

 

 

— IKnowNoBox, Oct 27, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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TheRealTearsICry

18 years 7 months ago

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wow, i love it!
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TheRealTearsICry

18 years 7 months ago

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ill try not to...
Mark

Mark

18 years 7 months ago

I like it all very much

including the title and the title , well you have a way with them - just perfect. Great work, Mark
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HiFlyGuy

18 years 7 months ago

Nicely done

Very classy and well thought out. You have done well for yourself. Kudos to you my dear.
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Ancientone

18 years 7 months ago

Punctuation....

goes a long ways to create better flow as well as spacing when appropriate. Nicely done otherwise, check spelling on confidence vs confidants, which did you mean? Patrick
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 7 months ago

Thank you AO

Could you message me the best puntuation that would help. Glad you liked it.
washing tears

washing tears

18 years 7 months ago

i like this alot, it reminds

i like this alot, it reminds me much of my friend from home who i miss so often, her sense of humor could brighten my day. thank you for sharing Washington Fear
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dbrock

18 years 7 months ago

…yet another great read!

...yet another great read! I'm in the process of attempting to try my hand at an Acrostic...not as easy as it seems...So BRAVO to you :)