If you post at NeoPoet

If you post at NeoPoet
you are a brave and generous soul
you may get crit
to whit
you can’t write
fuck off

you may get crit
to whit
I am so moved

I can now do it

or simply
eye
doesn’t rhyme
with symmetry

Would Blake have posted here?

— weirdelf, Oct 21, 2007

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Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics, The Mersey Sound, The Beats and, of course, The Bard

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Critiques

Mark

18 years 7 months ago

What a mind fuck

man I feel like I should not even be here, but then I am so shallow I bug box about haiku and the likes -maybe I'll stay and bug him some more - ha! "born to endless night"

weirdelf

18 years 7 months ago

check it out again Mark, I took out the mind fuck, I think

cheers, Jess

Mark

18 years 7 months ago

'tis my mind fucked been reading too much I get it I GET IT ! LOL Guess we can only guess 'bout Blake but lot's are sharing and hungry for feedback and Blake would have prolly come here were we alive as we surely are. Forcing the rhyme is a bad thing but I know this poet who puts in the rhyme upside backwards inside out and upside down and just all over the place and does it with mastery hmm I have not seen alot of that here (for what it's worth) A big problem I had with this was I was looking for more words instead of taking it more face value (like I said been reading too much I think) Regards and Thanks, Mark

orgami

18 years 7 months ago

shelter in the sunday sun

ha ha symetry rhymnes with Aye or ahoy hello matey arrgh tis Orgami enjoying the brightness of the day wind in the sails we leap to the bright horizon i must take leave now till again arrgh

Mark

18 years 7 months ago

LOL

RSScheerer

18 years ago

April 20th

is looking pretty good to me. Perhaps I'm better at giving than receiving? Blake. *laughing* Way to go, Tyger. Best, Ronda