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IKnowNoBox
Oct 18, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Deep Sleeper

if someone could

come down to me

I cannot lift my arm

surly I will not yell

listen as you might
sadly I am muted

if you discover my plot

I hope you dig it

you will have to

I am a deep sleeper

 

 

— IKnowNoBox, Oct 18, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Lex_Le Belle M…

18 years 7 months ago

Hmmm...

Amuses me yet makes me think. I am a bit confused on this one. Enlighten me please? Bowing gracefully after curtain call, your muse
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 7 months ago

I am moved,

the allegory here is deep and intensely sad and I feel it. My hand reaches sideways, not down, perhaps we can dig our way out like Beatrice Kiddo. cheers, Jess
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 7 months ago

Thank You Jess When I wrote this

I had felt buried,but not buried that got me I am used to that it was the feeling that the friends that I have may not have been looking for me. Thank you No Box
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barbsdad2003

18 years 7 months ago

A sensitive write this is

A nice connection here. Taken both literally ... and figuratively. Life has an uncanny (and indifferent) way of burying us from time to time. Two nights ago I woke myself and realized I had no left arm. I couldn't see one in the pitch-dark ... and no feeling (none at all) existed there. But when I reached for it with my right, there it was. Amazingly. On rolling over, I discovered, after a time it reappeared. By feel I mean; I still could not see it. Although I have seen it since. Thanx, Chuck
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Conect11

18 years 7 months ago

and you've conveyed

the feeling of being muted, in a funk, a haze. I feel death here, beautifully portrayed six feet deep. Mark W.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 7 months ago

Thank you Mark

I always make a trip the the cemetary (I do grave rubbing.)a fresh grave makes me think How good it is to be a live and On Tis Side Of the Dirt. Stay Tuned, No Box