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Calliope
Oct 16, 2007 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Excuse Me

The gentle waves,

are breathing,

A man,

his chest is heaving,

A spiders web,

he’s weaving,

Excuse me,

I was just leaving.

 

There are those,

who’ve been deceiving,

There are truths,

proved unbelieving,

Yet,you’re blind,

to what you’re seeing,

Excuse me,

I was just leaving.

 

Condemnation,

is not redeeming,

Judgment,

is what it’s seeming,

With rage,

your heart is teeming,

Excuse me,

I was just leaving.

— Calliope, Oct 16, 2007

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 9 months ago

I love this

some will tell you that using -ing as a rhyme is a strict no-no, but I use it myself shamelessly. I hear feeling and see clear enunciation of your intent. A pleasure to read. cheers, Jess "Are we having fun yet?"

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