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IKnowNoBox
Oct 13, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Ass -Haiku

unmovable ass

push tug this donkey won't  budge

kindly check its load

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

— IKnowNoBox, Oct 13, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Mark

Mark

18 years 8 months ago

Hey I can be a real ass at times lol

I'm not sure I really like this style in haiku. Meaning to say that it is one statement or continuous sentance style but that is me :-) I love the title ! smiles, Mulish Mark go figure - you can't satisfy the logic question lmao
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purplemoondoll

18 years 7 months ago

Nice Work!

My kids think I am a complete pain in the 'ass' most of the time so I can definitely relate to this one! I cannot really comment on the construction but I like the subject, humour and wisdom behind this piece. Nice work! Kaz x It's impossible to smile on the outside without feeling better on the inside.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 7 months ago

Thank you Kaz

Sometime a mule is stubborn only because it is overloaded,or its load is uneven. The first animal husbandry I learned from my Grandpa Jack. In ink, Dabbler