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Calliope
Oct 11, 2007 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Windblown

Gently swaying,
        in the breeze,

   The green and orange,
                  and golden leaves,

        They look so tranquil,
so at ease,

    No nervous energy
          within those trees,

No broken hearts,
           never teased,

                No tears,
      no fears ,
no hidden fees,

     By emotions,
               they’re never seized,

          Just Mother Nature ,
                    and those windblown leaves.


— Calliope, Oct 11, 2007

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 10 months ago

Hi Lacy

This is wonderful! I love poems about Mother Nature, and this is one of the best I have seen in a long time. Now, to answer your questions: Good title choice. Language selection, excellent. Rhyme, rhythm, and pacing is excellent, it fairly rolls off the tongue. Logic is right on the mark. Always, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 10 months ago

Dear Lacy

I just posted a poem on mother nature as well lol freaky ... this ones wonderful and I agree with all Cats says everything is right on the money beautiful work ... I loved this I cannot pick favourite lines I love it all love to you all Jayne x x
C

Calliope

16 years 10 months ago

Thanks guys!!

Just one of those that come right off the top your head you know ,came while watching the trees bend in the wind ,almost as if their dancing,lol,theirs another line to use Thanks for the read Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 9 months ago

This is well done.

effective allegory and 8 consecutive rhymes and the one repetition worked. Just wish you hadn't used "Mother Nature" cliche. cheers, Jess

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