The Life of the Party

He seemed a very happy boyFull of sweetness, light and joyFor every girl and every blokeHe always had a smile or a jokeWith everyone who crossed his pathHe always had a laughAlways vigorous and hardyHe was the life of the party

Then one night

They found him deadHe’d put a bullet in his headThey found a note beside his bedThis is what it said

It said his life had gone on too long

Everything about it had gone wrong

So long

FarewellTo all good nightWhat’s wrong can neverBe made right

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purplemoondoll

18 years 7 months ago

Wow

This is beautifully written, nice form, great rhythm and the whole piece flows brilliantly. There is only one place where I thought the rhyme was maybe a little forced:- Always vigorous and hardy He was the life of the party hardy and party didnt seem to go well for me-but see what you think. Apart from that I really enjoyed this -nice work! Kaz x

wolfycat

18 years 7 months ago

This Is Sad

This poem shows that you just never know what is really going on in a person's life. A happy exterior is not proof of a happy interior. Sad and moving. Makes one think. I loved your poem. Wolfycat.

weirdelf

18 years 7 months ago

Your structure works well

The party mode rhyming, rhythm and centering counterpoint the tragedy. Just one niggle. You say "this is what it said" then offer an interpretation before actually quoting the note. I think it would be more effective if it was just the note, verbatim. cheers, Jess

Fearlessfox

18 years 5 months ago

The Life of the Party

So well written-I am partial to rhyming poems. And so emotional and moving. I really like this a lot! People don't realize how much pain the "class clown" or comedian is usually feeling and this is a perfect example of life's ironic tragedies. Ffox

Barbara Writes

17 years 8 months ago

nice write

Smiles:) Barbara This reminds me of my daughter friend, life of the party everybody love him, but he did not love himself because he missed his brother who died of lukeima two year before he killed himself driving reckless on a rainy day wrapped his car around the pole. still have a picture of the crash, died 2 month after the accident. realize he wanted to live but was too messed up. he really wanted to be my son was all he talked about and my daughter his grandmother and me are friends and she said that all he talked about was the new girl and her mom, not knowing that me and my daughter was who he was referring to. i didn't know it was that serious until after the accident. they had plan to marry after she graduate and while he start taking school seriously and stay out of trouble.