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Upon Witnessing an Historic Title Fight

My calico cat(recently becoming an outdoor calico cat)has many challengersfor champion of our back yard;an important first steptill she takes over the streetfrom the road – toughened strays.This morning she is playing
with a grey field mouse.Playing is a more apropos wordthan fighting,though I suspect the tiny thingwill be dead just as soonas Cali decides it.*bat at*claws in, just paws*scurry, bounce, and chase.*The thing’s little bodyis shaking immenselyas it runs for cover under my slightly raised foot.I could squash it,I consider,but this is not my place in the world.But neither is saving itfrom my calico cat,whom I believeis just toying with it now.The pitiful thing tries to hideunder ivy growing wildat the edge of my driveway.It gets awayfor a second or two,and then my girl finds him.She gently grabshis entire little framein her mouth,like one of her own.Amazingly she does not kill him herebut rather brings him into the open,to the middle of the drivewaywhere she drops him, unceremoniouslyand continues her assault.Now,he is disoriented.His running becomes labored,while she*bats, bats, bats.*This cycle continues onat a slower and slower pace.He moves,she pounces.He stays still,she searches,seemingly losing himin the grey of the driveway.If he’d just stay still,he might stand half a chance.But then soon,he will stay stillfor a very long time. 
— Conect11, Oct 05, 2007

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Quillsvein1

18 years 8 months ago

this

is not quite foreman vs ali, but your cat had quite a struggle here and i imagine it was nasty to watch--i've only seen a cat devour a mouse maybe once in my life and that when i was a child. pitiless nature. you describe this with such detail to minutae that the essential grisliness disappears for a moment and one is inside the poem. our basic helplessness during these moments is near perfectly portrayed. a poem one does not forget easily, certianly. great job.
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 4 months ago

Mark

You're cat's a little piggy-pork! She is hunting a mouse, AND she has a dead birdie by her too? Greedy little thing. I shouldn't talk - Jai SOUNDS like a pig when she wolfs down canned food (she loves it!) with her grunts, and licking sounds, and that 'chewy' sound you get when your mouth is open. She even gets hiccups afterwards because she eats too fast! (which are hilarious to watch) I almost passed over this one, because at first I thought it was going to be about boxing. Then I read the teaser, and here I am! Great story-telling, and flow. ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Handle every situation like a dog: if you can't eat it, or screw it, piss on it and walk away!"
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Conect11

17 years 4 months ago

lol!

funny, Stella and I have been having a discussion over titles driving people away today. (oooh, that rhymed:) ) Now it almost hit me, lol! Interestingly enough I never saw Callie wolf the thing down. I honestly think she was just into playing it to death. Cat hiccups ARE hilarious, but I have to admit that cat farts are among the most disgusting smells in the world. My thanks for reading! Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible
infinite_dwarf

infinite_dwarf

17 years 4 months ago

indeedy-do

Was on the sofa one day reading, and Jai jumped up beside me. Her butt was towards my face as she was kneeding the blanket. All the sudden this HORRID smell came out of her. Jon never lets me live it down that the cat farted on me. She had the wrong person for revenge, as I'M not the one that gives her dutch-ovens, or blows one out as she sits on my lap. I'm a good caring parent.... He seriously does love that cat, though, so don't call the ASPCA on him :~) ~Jess K. ---------------------------------------------------- -"Handle every situation like a dog: if you can't eat it, or screw it, piss on it and walk away!"
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

17 years 4 months ago

Mark

I love your cat. heehee This is good. It caught me and absorbed my attention completely. Like the title. Language use is really good. The flow is a little odd to me, but then I am a bit old fashioned when it comes to metre, I think. Even so it does go along smoothly if I slow down a bit! The theme....well, I can't remember how many times I've watched my cats do this to mice that had the temerity to invade our home! Enough said! Love the ending...memorable. Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
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Conect11

17 years 4 months ago

thanks Jim!

she was a great kitty, had to give her to a family friend last year. Her son now lives with us, though, and he carries on his ma's cunning playfulness. The poem DOES have a slower meter, but I could tell you some tripe about how it is supposed to replicate my cat slowly hunting the mouse. Hmmmm, built in excuse! Thanks Jim! "Yeah! It's totally slow to mimic the stealth of my cat...yeah, that's the ticket...." Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible
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James

17 years 4 months ago

This poem is excellent. I

This poem is excellent. I love the way you made such a sensory use of an ordinary experience, it had a real Modernist feel to it, like something William Carlos Williams would write - also, being a cat owner mself I am well familiar with these kind of scenes. Parts of it made me laugh, in a good way, but I love the way each line is so stark and incidental, it reminds me of my own style, though I've never pulled off anything quite this quirky. Hope your cat is well.
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Conect11

17 years 4 months ago

thank you for your kind words, James

the cat is probably doing better than the mouse! Unfortunately we gave her up to a family friend six months ago. (my she had kittens, and my wife was not at all big on having more than one cat in the house. Actually, she doesn't even like having one cat in the house!) I'm flattered by the W.C.W reference, thank you! You made my day with your detailed, and well constructed comment. :) Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible