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I am a creature of the night


Sister Night, be welcome on my window-sill
O velvet-eyed one, o jewel-clad queen
 
Your hair is fashioned from clouds
Your sceptre a wand
You cast veils of darkness with
 
The moon is your shining face
Your voice is gentle and calm
But when you raise it like a storm
 
Your castle is vast
You inhabit the whole universe
Your magic enables mankind to glimpse your majestic void
 
Your demeanour is cool
You rejoice in subtler colours
Than day's frivolous brightness does
 
Your attitude is sincere
Your dignity allows you to move more gracefully
Than the narcissistic day could ever idly dance
 
Mankind tends to frolic in the daylight
And shy away from the strangeness of the night
But I enjoy your comforting embrace
More than your twin's smiling face
  

 

 

 

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Ink Dragon

18 years 7 months ago

I think I got carried away

by the theme, because my love for the night is the most longlasting relationship I ever had*grin* Thanks for your comment on my style of expression, I have never before thought of it as "new" or anything like... Regards, Ink Dragon
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 7 months ago

As a worker Graveyard

I see where it is and the environment that breed it. Well, a posting more personal.I agree with Elf you do better. in ink, David
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Ink Dragon

18 years 7 months ago

Not trying something new

but rather sifting through the past. I used to do loads of this stuff about 10 years ago, and this piece is fashioned from two old, shorter ones. Regards, ID
RSScheerer

RSScheerer

18 years 7 months ago

Still identify with this theme

I still believe that this is some of the best imagery that I've seen from your work. After re-reading several times and looking over the reviews of others, I think that the problem may lie in the personification of the night. Perhaps there are too many uses of the pronoun "you" and its variations. Maybe find a way around that; give the night its personality without specifically addressing it so conversationally. Does this make sense?
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Ink Dragon

17 years 5 months ago

It has taken me a long time

to come up with something. I don´t know whether the change of the pronoun really makes a difference... Please let me know, ID
Seren

Seren

16 years 11 months ago

I love this creature of the

I love this creature of the night and this appealed to me the first time I read it and even more so a second time round ... loved this one Nina ... Much love Jayne x
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Jay,

I enjoyed your night poem a lot, too. Glad you liked mine! Yours, ~Nina
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Nina

five stars from a fellow lover of the night. Always, Cat