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Waterloo

  At the coners of the pane water forms Then crystallizes into ice The long process ends with a single unconcentrated breathe That melts it all away   The light shines through cracks And lets out lines of hope, That are so eloquently placed on the floor But your eyes blind mine, and block the sun from the sky   In the event of failure The overshadowed dreams and all your old regrets come out And you realize your flaws And change to become what you are   Take down the walls They can’t contain us all But I got this dream that I can’t explain It’s you and me, with the world at out feet I have eyes at my feet, and a hand at my well worn finger tips   Take the pain from my eyes And follow the tiles till the end Then come the falling hammers on the chords But in silence the vibrations fail, they seek the science to replace the fate   In the event of failure take the bricks from the wall Behind them you will find my feelings hidden in plane view But with a single word from your lips They melt away the ice on my eyelids   Behind These Locked Doors My heart Beats hard But I boarded up these windows To lock myself away For I failed the world in every way
— washing tears, Oct 03, 2007

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Region, Country: sandusky, ohio, USA

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purplemoondoll

18 years 8 months ago

Excellent emotion and imagery

There's one typing error in the first line - should coners read corners? Apart from that this again shows skill with imagery and it flowed well for me. I like these lines... In the event of failure take the bricks from the wall Behind them you will find my feelings hidden in plane view But with a single word from your lips They melt away the ice on my eyelids Nice work. Kaz x