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Ink Dragon
Oct 05, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Icicles down my spine

 Icicles down my spine

Icicles grow on my spine
They were designed to keep away
The forbidden touching of my body, my soul


My soul is frozen over with frost
It was designed to keep away
The forbidden feelings of my body, my soul

My body aches with spasms from the cold
Now the icicles have grown two sharp ends
One pointing outwards and one piercing my very heart


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Ink Dragon

18 years 7 months ago

Thanks

glad you enjoyed it. Regards, Ink Dragon
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Ink Dragon

18 years 7 months ago

You´re soo right

because we cannot help feeling certain things, no matter how hard we try... regards, Ink Dragon
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follettvogue

18 years 7 months ago

poem

paula buckenham look but dont touch, i am fozen but dont try to melt me, shutting it all out, thats what this poem evokes , introvert , thats the word , i liked the poem very much. paula
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Ink Dragon

18 years 7 months ago

Thank you

again for your kind comments and understanding. I´ll look up your stuff as soon as I find the time...promise! poetic Regards, Ink Dragon
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Nordic cloud

17 years 1 month ago

Excruciating

Nina oh Nina who did that to you, or made you feel this? I shall come with my sword and flail him, I was a fencer for my county in Leicester c ity an even almost joined the Olympic team, but it was a dedication I decided not to take, travelling to London once a week, it would need a great love to do that. Your poem is penetrating and comes from the right city does it not? Ann with love.
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Ink Dragon

17 years 1 month ago

Ann,

what a wonderful surprise to find your sweet comment under this old piece! I do hope you are still doing the fencing? (Coming from a city that makes swords, I am rather partial to that sport.) Yours, ~Nina
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Arrow

17 years 1 month ago

I like this as well,

esp. the parallel structure of the first 2 stanzas. I hear a slight rhyme at the end of this, i.e., "piercing the heart within," but that is commentary rather than suggestion. Simple, powerful piece.
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Ink Dragon

17 years 1 month ago

Arrow,

thank you so much for your comment! I must admit I am rather fond of this old write, so I am truly grateful for your reading this. Yours, ~Nina
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Craig Norris

16 years 11 months ago

Nina

reaching to you from the back pages I like this very much, but may I suggest that "the icicles seem to have grown" somewhat takes the edge off their intent. Their points are real, therefore making those words redundant, the icicles have grown two sharp ends, for me this seems to hone them. with respect. Craig
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Mhm,

interesting thought, Craig. I think I will try your suggestion. Thanks for giving me a new angle on this old write, it's much appreciated. Yours, ~Nina
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orgami

16 years 11 months ago

from a time then to now

this is an intense short poem like the warmth of soul was taken wow great poem
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Wow, Orgami,

I feel honoured that you read and liked this old piece. Thanks, ~Nina
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Tink

16 years 11 months ago

my dearest nina,

What a powerful piece, the first two stanzas ooze of hurt and pain, the last is the most stunning! Smacked me right upside the head that stopped my heart... wow! it speaks volumes to me. the impact...just wow. Live, Laugh and Love (and don't forget to write) Tink
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Ink Dragon

16 years 11 months ago

Tink, wow!

What a wowsie comment. Glad you can understand this piece. Thanks, ~Nina