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Frost Smith
Frost Smith
Sep 23, 2007 ⭐ See this poem's read count — a supporter feature

Glancing from a distance

 

 

The first times I saw you

We just passed by

Never notice what was we miss

So wrapped up in me, myself, & I

Smiles exchanged that say a thousand words

None of which can tell a lie

Feelings I can’t bring myself to utter

Don’t want to just stutter

I can convince myself of anything

Talk myself out too

One day get up the courage

Too talk too you

 

— Frost Smith, Sep 23, 2007

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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Lovely Writing

This is beautiful. I love the awkwardness it conveys and the fear of taking that first step. Brilliant. I relate so well to these lines. I can convince myself of anything Talk myself out too. Just one typo I can spot and that's in the last line. Should read 'to' instead of 'too'? Nice work Kaz x
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Quillsvein1

18 years 10 months ago

this

conveys pretty directly the awkward, clumsy way we approach others, particularly members of the opposite sex--for a moment our narcissistic head cold has to burst and it is obligatory that we enter another's world. touchingly pure poem.
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JulieMcCarty

18 years 10 months ago

It is so

weird how we find it hard to talk to one another when there is an attraction. I like this poem because I to have had my stuttering moments when I have seen someone I wanted to get to know. Love it! :) Julie
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barbsdad2003

18 years 9 months ago

A Sort of American Version of a Haiku Here?

I think. You've picked up on a common detail so oft overlooked by most of us. It's a shy detail that needs our attention/respect. And you right here have ably given it. Thanx, Chuck PS: By my count, assuming I can calculate correctly, you have on two occasions typed too for to. But as to content? This piece is wonderful.

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