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Straight to Concrete

 From life under a bridge

seventeen years or so ago

occupation: Squatter

 

Redesigned our "bunker"

Seventeen years or so ago

occupation :Car juice jockey

 

Fire guts the fortress

fifteen years or so ago

occupation:gas,cigerette,and coffee vender

 

Return to remove ashes from purgatory 

fifteen years or so ago

occupation:Skilled employee

 

Ascension  to a shack

fourteen years or so ago

occupation:Night Clerk

 

Still in the dog house

ten years  or so ago

occupation:Certified  Employee

 

An option to upgrade

ten years or so ago

occupation:unemployed insurance collector

 

In transition house sitting

five years or so ago

occupation: Night Manager

 

A duplex to move into

three years or so ago

occupation:Company employee

 

A wonderful place to live

two years or so ago

occupation :Sceptical employee

 

Landlady is annoying

 one year or so ago

occupation:Disgruntled Grave yard shift guy

 

Owners sell the complex

eight  months or so ago

occupation:Harbinger

 

Sacrificed my lush pad

six months or so ago

occupation: thinking what’s next

 

Straight to concrete

four months or so ago

occupation:whatever I want to do

 

Pergatory is my studio

currently

occupation:Waiting to see

— IKnowNoBox, Sep 20, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Tuttey

18 years 8 months ago

Good Read

At first I felt I was going in reverse. After reading the first few verses I realized I was going forward. I have a hard time giving constructive thoughts for who am I to judge someone elses art. Here we go... If you switched the last 2 verses the title is concrete and the end fits. The pattern and rhythm stutters just a bit for the first 3 or 4 verses. Was I too harsh? Timid, T
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Spirit Song

18 years 8 months ago

Creative delivery...

Great title! Your pacing and time-line format brought this write to LIFE! I was smiling as I read your poem, thinking... oh the memories : ) a reflection of self pennned by another. Totally connected with your creative conveyance. Your closing stanza does leave a hopeful note of optimism, again bringing a smile. Well done Poet! Blessings from Hawaii, Jerry It is said there are two ways of doing things The right way and the wrong way I believe there is a third way A NEW WAY JVS