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barbsdad2003
Sep 25, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

in the eye of an infidel lost in an Arab city ...

 

mere man-made creations,

 

thrusting minarets

like sprouting cigarettes,

 

do pierce the air

most everywhere …

 

as chiefly blasphemies,

if so you may well please,

 

and their abominations,

 

to be absolutely fair

and blasted hopeless square.

 

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Michael Landau

18 years 7 months ago

Hello, I must preface my

Hello, I must preface my comment by saying that I am not a Muslim. That being said, I would like to say that while I am not personally insulted by this poem, I believe that a Muslim person probably would be insulted. Why do you compare the minarets of a mosque to cigarettes, blasphemies, and abominations? I think that it is very ironic that this poem mentions being absolutely fair. I don't think there's anything fair about it. This is just my emotional reaction to your poem. If I have completely missed the point of your poem, please let me know. I would be very interested to hear your perspective. I think the rhyming and the rhythm of the poem is very good. Thanks, Mike Landau
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barbsdad2003

18 years 7 months ago

"Please let me know."

Okay, then. You have "completely missed the point" of another of my poems---a fact which does not surprise me. What does surprise me is your apparent belief that I would/should concern myself with the test of religious insults before I complete a write. On the presence or absence of absolute fairness, maybe that is not for you to judge. Chuck
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Michael Landau

18 years 7 months ago

After rereading your poem, I

After rereading your poem, I realize that I did miss the point. Somehow, I overlooked the first line of the poem. The first sentence is the key to the entire poem. The cigarettes, blasphemies, and abominations are all man-made creations. You are refering to the minarets as man-made creations, not necessarily as religious symbols. When you say absolutely fair and blasted hopelessly square, you are refering to the lines of the building and not any moral judgment, as I had mistakenly understood you to mean. Please accept my sincerest apologies. I completely retract the statements that I made. In future, I will make an effort to read more carefully. Forgive me for my error. Sincerely, Michael
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Conect11

18 years 7 months ago

and indeed

I felt like I were there in that very rarified air. Once again your poems I do applaude. In fact no, I actually laud! Mark W.
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purplemoondoll

18 years 7 months ago

As Always Chuck

You have created something that can only be described as awesome. Excellent! Kaz x
Mark

Mark

18 years 7 months ago

I suppose

I suppose you can put a square in a circle if the circle is big enough or even your brains in a jar but one thing is for sure Chuck - only your poetry provokes thoughts in my skull at 6 AM on a Monday morning. I applaude and bow to you sir, Mark