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barbsdad2003
Sep 24, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Pew!

 

While attending church,

We pay a price for the pew

 

(And then its stinking residue)

 

That wafts so all about us

From the smelly not so very few.

 

(Author’s note: Just a piece

here, in brief, in memory of

the malodorous perfumes

that far too many well-meaning

folks trail into Sunday morning

services.)

 

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Conect11

18 years 7 months ago

I do remember

those smells from childhood at church. I just equated the smell with old people. I don't smell it so much anymore. Perhaps I am becoming an old person. As to the poem, as always structure and rhyme are nearly perfect. I stumbled a little reading the last two lines, but that was more my pace than yours. Mark W.
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barbsdad2003

18 years 7 months ago

Hey, Mark!

It's funny you should specify smells from childhood. That is exactly what I had in mind when I wrote the piece, but the completed product offers no hint to my coming from memory. As you may know, older people tend to experience losses of taste and smell. So maybe in your declining years you can't detect what is there for detection. On the other hand, perhaps nowadays there isn't so much pew being dispersed from pews. And so then even if your smeller were sharp, you'd not pick up on it. All speculation. And I speak out of turn. It's been years since I've graced a church's pew with my ... Thanx for the comment, Chuck
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Spirit Song

18 years 7 months ago

Your Author's notes

made clear your message and intent : ) without them I would have received your words in a totally different perspective : ) Nice play on words Poet! It is said there are two ways of doing things The right way and the wrong way I believe there is a third way A NEW WAY JVS
Mark

Mark

18 years 7 months ago

As A Once Part Time Janitor

of a bank I never had a problem. In and out of each branch in a half hour. I wonder if money is an issue - nothing sweet nothing sour :-) As a buildings and grounds mechanic for elderly and low income family housing - man o man (never mind)