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IKnowNoBox
Sep 18, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Journey...*

 

         from the

                             water

                              of

                              my

                              beginning

 

           to the          

                              ground  where my

                              remains lie an

                              abandoned empty

                              vessel rotting under

                              earth

     

 

                              

             

                              

— IKnowNoBox, Sep 18, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 5 months ago

You de man!

a perfect acrostic- the total transcends the form. cheers, Jess wishing you a Salubrious Solstice
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 5 months ago

Thanks Jess

if you notice I have submitted fewer acrostics part of that reason is because you challenged me with the form...same with the haiku form. The site really helped me unlock and tool around this form. In ink, David
Frost Smith

Frost Smith

18 years 8 months ago

Sunrise, Sunset...

We are not our bodys; for they will decompose, we are our spirt inside; energy which will transpose I like the qoute: "life's a journey, not a destenation" Nice piece
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 8 months ago

Thank you Julie

This was inspired By Oragami,from his comment to another acrostic.I am glad you like it.It was the quickest one I have ever done. In ink, David
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Conect11

18 years 8 months ago

simple perfection

absolutely adored this gem. Perhaps best so far out of any of your acrostics. You've fit each stanza perfectly to its subject. Fabulous! Mark W.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 8 months ago

Thank you Mark

For the comment and all the support.You helped me build the path that lead me here. In ink, David
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Ink Dragon

18 years 8 months ago

You´ve come full circle...

again, I am awed by your creative use of acrostic spelling. I have only two little criticisms: Why did you post it as a haiku? And please loose the commas, they made my gaze stumble! With poetic regards, Ink Dragon
LR

Lex_Le Belle M…

18 years 7 months ago

Intriguing

Intriguingly beautiful. Interesting choice. Bowing gracefully, Your muse
Mark

Mark

18 years 5 months ago

Oh Yeah!

Personnally, though, I would rather be above ground and food for bear all they really get around here is a few berries and and some grubs :) Hope I can find my way far enough to the land of the bear when it is time. A sad thing as I was comming across a very young lady early on but noticeable then it was gone ??? Very sad ! Mark L a point among infinite points in the circle am I PS: your first comment? The first vote? lol
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meic

18 years 5 months ago

Immensely clever [especially

Immensely clever [especially in avoiding cradle!] and wholly satisfying. Bravo! Mike photo: me, late teens/early twenties - 1st 'face furniture'
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

God this one takes your

God this one takes your breath away I am speachless wonderful write ... thank you for showing me the way it was a trip worth taking love and hugs Jayne-Chloe
Mark

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Jess ..

How could I miss that ! ::stun gunned:: Mark You are the leaf, I am the tree. Cling onto me, I'll grow into you. http://www.neopoet.com/node/36042