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IKnowNoBox
Sep 15, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Cross Finale (acrostic)

     She is screaming

     And

     Yelling, I Am

     NOT Going To "CHILL

     OUT" !, I Want You To

     MOVE  The F**K

     OUT! Because ,

     Right Now…!

     EVERYTHING!

     About You Makes  Me

     SICK ! YOU'RE  A  F**KING!

     SORRY Excuse For A

     Human Being !And

     Our

     Lives Will Be…

     Enriched Without You In It ! NOW

      !

     GET  The  F**K

     OUT!!!

      !

      !

 

 

 

— IKnowNoBox, Sep 15, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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Quillsvein1

18 years 8 months ago

wow

do i detect a little bitterness here?
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 8 months ago

How do you like my reflection on ...

The word ASSHOLE? or Go? I've heard women go to town like this and I Say ,"More power to them." a Loser that hears this had it coming. For the Abused, David It's acrostic for SAY NO MORE ASSHOLE GO
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JulieMcCarty

18 years 8 months ago

This poem is

very clever and full of emotion,but I feel it is also manic. I can feel the anger coming through here. In life I found that as soon as you start yelling people stop listening. It is the soft spoken that we must worry about. I find myself yelling a lot and when I look around I am alone, it is like no one cares when I am like that. I am working on chaneling my anger and finding new ways to express myself. It is working for me. I hope you find an inner peace and a way to express your pain that will get people to listen instead of having them shut you down. Bravery and strenght comes in many forms :) Julie
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 8 months ago

Here is my Finale coming a cross,

I know of words that hurt,I know of Humans That flip off anybody who would give them a shot a redemtion ,Maybe I missed the sternness ,and desperation.I was looking for the Peak of a long- made -hell and the Unmistaken Good Bye To Bad Rubbish, I wish to empower the Victems for the crucial moment.Are the pauses clearly placed I hoped to include the tears.To walk away from one such as this is what I truely advocate Maybe my inner child Wrote this one to be done with an asshole of a human being.Thank you for catching my Maniac Mood. In Ink, David
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JulieMcCarty

18 years 8 months ago

Yes

I think your pauses are placed perfectly and I did catch the "good bye to bad rubbish" and as to you saying you advocate "walking away from one such as this" Jesus did the same in the square when the man slapped him on the cheek. Jesus said he forgave the man and turned the other cheek and the man slapped Jesus again. What did Jesus do then? He told the man he forgave him and then he never saw him again. Meaning to me that you must forgive someone to heal your own heart but you do not have to stick around to keep subjecting yourself to abuse. Are we better than Jesus? I say not! :) Sometimes we need to get angry to keep ourselves protected but I found that my words can sometimes be sharper than a sword without raising my voice. :) Julie
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RandomThoughts

18 years 8 months ago

yes!

I love the anger you put fourth in this piece. Screaming makes them notice anger makes them quiver. So powerful I much enjoyed this one. If you can't scream on paper where must you scream. You just woke me up as I was bout to fall asleep. Loved it.
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RandomThoughts

18 years 8 months ago

Sure did

I did catch that and it is very clever of you never seen that before but then again I dont read that much so ya know but it was a great piece or so I thought so
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 8 months ago

I value your insight Random...

for the very fact that it is so rare(anything else would not be random incarnate)We the Day Dreamers are on a larger network are we not? in ink, Dabbler (King of La la)
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Conect11

18 years 8 months ago

oh Box, oh Box

my well intentioned and immensely talented friend please do not be discouraged when I tell you that I liked nothing about this poem. One of the points of the acrostic is subtlety, and here I am beaten over the head. I sense your raw anger, that is apparent. Unfortunately this is much like a homemade tomato sauce with fresh ingredients that you have left on the stove at ultra high heat. After just a little bit it begins to boil over and make a mess of the stove, and worse scorches the bottom of the pan. I think it's great that you have learned to master the acrostic form. Bear in mind though that an acrostic in its most beautiful is a mystery to be figured out by the reader. There are several books of the Bible, several Psalms and proverbs that are acrostic. Can you find them? There are many other forms of acrostic as well, the word doesn't always have to be formed with the first letter. :) Mark W.
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 8 months ago

Seen as Ugly ..

meant to make people gag,repulsed,a world were such things exist,Where The slime left over after a Dirt Bag Convention prey upon the weak.I have heard these expletives,so much,and here is were I leave them,Said twice at once. Grand analogy 11,I will now return my Dagger to the Kitchen Where it will be used to prepare a desirable stew.One that nurtures the body and spirit. Honestly it's as if a demon left me when I hit submit on this one,I awoke with a fright the eve of it's inception I will tell you more in message . I am not Discouraged,or Offended,by your directness a strong response out of concern. I am comforted that the world is not as Mad as it seems. I am comforted that there are people who would bring me down from an edge with a whisper,possible saving a life from ruin. As I have done for others. In Ink, David