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The Girl

  I was there the moment you were born, when you were placed in a warm incubator. With you Little Flower with unshed lanugo and cream in your creases for me to pick out, for me to wipe clean.   I was there when you opened your eyes and went kicking and screaming into a larger world. A stork bitten girl, a victory sign? Indeed, victory, you of chubby cheeks and you, beloved. What’s not to admire? You laugh at my jokes, and smile when you see me, an instant connection: "Hi, dad!" in an unclear voice. I am a mist upon first listen, I am a mist up through the vents and windows. Kisses, kisses, chew on the tummy and the chin.   Giggle, baby. You are loved. Forget this not.    
— Conect11, Sep 12, 2007

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Mark

Mark

18 years 9 months ago

Yeah

after eleven hours she came out. I don't think she wanted to?? Before I knew it, I - nobody could keep up with her. She was everywhere at the same time it seemed. Thanks, Mark
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barbsdad2003

18 years 9 months ago

A Wonderful Piece

A fitting memorial. Don't lose it. At future times when she's feeling calm and cool, even post-childhood, she'll reflect ... and again gain from its strength. Yours, Chuck PS: By the way ... and congratulations!
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 8 months ago

You are a true poet

I misted up reading this, even while never having been a father. I think it is your generousity of spirit along with your wordcraftsmanship that make you so fucking good. cheers, Jess