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Death Hour

  This used to be a casual walk, but no more. Become a parent and you’ll develop a new fear of the mundane. I used to walk for miles at four in the morning, three in the morning with Spencer Mills, and Joeseph Zaccaria - my favorite walks. But now these people are dead to me. When I was a young adult I swore the night sky was black, plain black. Now I see it is inky and blue like a velvet curtain, like purple royalty and I a peasant. All my friends want to be kings. I used to want to be king. Now I don’t trust them. Now there are smells, complex: an electric fire? a skunk? or burning garlic? All these things are ten years old. Don’t fear for me, instead be gracious. Be humble, and prayerful.    
— Conect11, Sep 10, 2007

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weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 9 months ago

Beautiful and highly evocative, Mark

the night sky has changed for me too, us city dwellers seldom see it in all its glory. Strangely I never wanted to be a king, maybe I am missing the ambition gene, but those friends who have become economic kings also stink, of electricity, I have never smelled a skunk and something strangely metallic, like if you gave Bender (from Futurama) a blow job. Eeek and eeeuuw! Hope that image doesn't give you nightmares! cheers, Jess
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IKnowNoBox

18 years 9 months ago

The only thing that could improve this poem,

is the setting in which I read it. Really makes a point about friends and associates. Some people get going away parties others are the reason for gone away parties. I could go on and on with all the thoughts this work flooded me with. In ink, Dabbler