Feebie

Sep 08, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

He loves us

This was written by my son:

As my heart beats

God has him in his hands

and we love Him and His son

we love them

so do we love our Moms and Dads to

dogs and cats, we love them to

God loves us

If we are good or bad

He will love you to

Written by Daniel J Ferrey age 7

07.09.2007

— Feebie, Sep 08, 2007

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Gauteng, ZMB

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath, Robert Frost

Critiques

purplemoondoll

18 years 9 months ago

Daniel

This is a wonderful poem. Beautifully written and full of love and emotion. Very well done! How about 'He Loves Us' as a title? best wishes - Kaz

Jillian Botha

18 years 9 months ago

I will ask Danny and see what he says...

Hey Kaz I will definitley ask my son and see what he thinks. Thanks i will also print this feedback for him to show him :-)(i think he is going to be a brilliant writer some day!!!!!) kind regards Feebie Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)

purplemoondoll

18 years 9 months ago

Hey Feebie

If he can produce this standard at the age of 7, I can't wait to see how his writing develops. Best wishes Kaz x

Jillian Botha

18 years 9 months ago

Hi Kaz

Hi Kaz I know what you mean hey, he has a real talent for this and i am sooo proud of him. I am going to really help to nurture this talent and to help it grow to it's full potential!!!! Thanks Feebie Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)

docmaverick

18 years 9 months ago

The apple doesn't fall far from the tree...

..does it? This is very good for a boy of 12 or 13. He DOES have talent worth nurturing. A very precious piece. Doc.

Jillian Botha

18 years 9 months ago

Hiya Doc

Hi Doc He is actually only going to be 8 next month, so i thought for an alnost 8 year old this was well written with thought and a maturity that is beyond his years. I will let him know what you said thank you so much for reading his work :-) Kind regards Feebie Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)

Mark

18 years 8 months ago

Daniel Thank You

You bring my mind to peace and I think quietly now. Good Night, Mark