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IKnowNoBox
Sep 06, 2007 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Straight to Concrete

 From life under a bridge

seventeen years or so ago

occupation: Squatter

 

Redsigned our "bunker"

Seventeen years or so ago

occupation :Car juice jockey

 

Fire guts the fortress

fifteen years or so ago

occupation:gas,cigarette,and coffee vender

 

Return to remove ashes from pergatory 

fifteen years or so ago

occupation:Skilled employee

 

Ascension  to a shack

fourteen years or so ago

occupation:Night Clerk

 

Still in the dog house

ten years  or so ago

occupation:Certified  Employee

 

An option to upgrade

ten years or so ago

occupation:unemployed insurance collector

 

In transition house sitting

five years or so ago

occupation: Night Manager

 

A duplex to move into

three years or so ago

occupation:Company employee

 

A wonderful place to live

two years or so ago

occupation :Sceptical employee

 

Landlady is annoying

 one year or so ago

occupation:Disgruntled Grave yard shift guy

 

Owners sell the complex

eight  months or so ago

occupation:Harbinger

 

Sacrificed my lush pad

six months or so ago

occupation: thinking what’s next

 

Straight to concrete

four months or so ago

occupation:whatever I want to do

 

Pergatory is my studio

currently

occupation:Waiting to see

 

 

— IKnowNoBox, Sep 06, 2007

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Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

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IKnowNoBox

18 years 9 months ago

This is a redundance

i usually stear clear the redundants but since a few of you gave me some great examples here's mine.
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waterdragon

18 years 9 months ago

Like your stuff!

This one reminds me of one I wrote about one of my brothers - I'll post it -- Wondering, are your misspellings intentional? Peace! & Keep writing - you're good! Reverend Bec Hudson Shine Your Light It's the ONLY Way to Get Rid of the Darkness!
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waterdragon

18 years 9 months ago

Works in Progress Rock!

I totally appreciate where you're coming from! May I recommend, when in doubt, if you have Word on your computer, open a blank page, cut & paste your wonderful poetry, then do a spell check (simultaneously holding the shift + F7 key down. (If you already know this, cool - please don't think I'm being patronizing, 'cuz I'm not) Word will highlight words it does not recognize and give you alternative spelling suggestions. Your work is just too good not to make shine even brighter when u can. Take care, Dabbler! I look forward to reading more from you! Reverend Bec Hudson Shine Your Light It's the ONLY Way to Get Rid of the Darkness!