haiku

wolf pack on the hunt

hunger is their enemy

an elk is their prey

— IKnowNoBox, Sep 02, 2007

About the Author

Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf, Shel Silverstein, The Poet Anonymous

Critiques

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

I like this

IKnow.. do you mean to say pack on in the stead of packon

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

which is not clear It misses the point of a haiku which traditionally uses a reference to nature to make a statement about philosophy or feeling. You know I can be brutal in my crits. No offense. cheers, Jess

IKnowNoBox

18 years 10 months ago

I know...

and if you wore boxing gloves in a bar fight,I would tell you to take them off. If a person tanks the last thing that person needs is somebody saying something mushy or PC. refernce to nature to make a statement about philosophy of feeling. Thank you I will take this for a ride. Stay tuned, Dabbler

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

what wimp would wear boxing gloves in a bar fight?

I cheerfully take part in a brawl on this site as I used to do when younger and hopefully more foolish in bars. But this was not meant to be offensive, I respected your imagery while feeling strongly that the haiku form has a lot more to offer. It is the most intense form of poetic compression I have encountered, and believe it deserves that respect. with respect, Jess

IKnowNoBox

18 years 10 months ago

Well put Jess

I take nothing as offensive,every thing toward improvement is excepted and taken to betterment of this craft that is new to me(well revisited). In ink, David

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haiku

About the Author

Critiques

I like this

unless this is an allegory

I know...

what wimp would wear boxing gloves in a bar fight?

Well put Jess