"Good To Be Known"

Your words shred the nighttime like
clipping shafts of light
or airborne sun scissors.
I grasped faintly at the locks trembling
and hued with dark for the pieces
of my spliced shadow.
And with a desperate dive worthy
of a bow legged swimmer,
found the absence of what was.

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weirdelf

18 years 8 months ago

Again I envious of your skill and craft

The beginning of the poem was, clearly sharp, incisive, possibly cruel, but The "bow legged swimmer" added your own vulnerability that made it real. cheers, Jess

Quillsvein1

18 years 8 months ago

Thank

you. i often wonder if my attention to detail turns off potential readers. best, john

weirdelf

18 years 8 months ago

well, you could write limericks

Yes, your attention to detail does turn off some readers, but which readers do you care about? I work and work at apprehending the complexity, depth, meaning and craft of your poetry, and often screw up. But by all I believe about poetry your work is so well worth it. If you really want to be more accessible look at the "Mersey Sound", pop Liverpuddian poets writing around the time of the Beatles. Roger Mcgough, Adrian Henry, Brian Pattern. And especially the wonderful Greek/Australian poet Komninos cheers, Jess

weirdelf

18 years 8 months ago

I will post Kominos' work "My Friends"

cheers, Jess

IKnowNoBox

18 years 8 months ago

I feel like,

a I'm trying to look at an adult movie when I read this. In ink, Dabbler ps What a title!

pinksheep

17 years 11 months ago

This

poem is unbelievable that is about the best comment from me-I may be wrong (so it goes without saying) please ignore me if i am, is the and needed beginning of 7th line? It maybe i d'ont know-20 out of 5

Quillsvein1

17 years 11 months ago

thank you

for the kind comment! that line may or may not be necessary, i'd have to think about it, i wrote it so long ago. best!