SHE

She

She is a unwritten poem and

she is the word of beatuty

She is an angel of my sky and

She is the dawn of my life

Every seconds of my life are her rewards

cause my soul is in her heart

My every sight on this earth is her gift

cause Iam seeing everything through her eyes

Every word of my poem is her blessings

cause I am writing from her beauty

Every flower in this earth blossoms to decorate her

Every rain drop from the sky prays her to fall

to make soft the earth to her silky feet.

My poem is too little before her

cause she is the ocean of beauty and

I am a drop from that ocean.

SAKTHI RAVICHANDRAN AN INDIAN ENGLISH POET

— SAKTHEEE2007, Aug 29, 2007

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weirdelf

18 years 9 months ago

A peom written in amood of romance, no kidding.

I lovver you generousness, And romance. This is lovely but it is a poem for you lover, we appreciate you poetry, but it offered nothing new on love. i noticed you have commented on other peoples poems, and contributed to the forums. Thank you for listening to me. I know your generousity of spirit and love to see that you are returning the feedback that this site is all about. Congratulations cheers, Jess

barbsdad2003

18 years 9 months ago

Don't Be Discouraged, Ravee:

Keep writing. Not everything comes out wonderfully. Main problem with this one is what Jess indicates. It's a road too much traveled ... and needs a fresh twist and an uncommon turn or two. Which I know are things you can accomplish. Thanx again, Grandpa

JPM

18 years 9 months ago

Very nice poem

Will Searles Carman

18 years 8 months ago

She

Sakkthee ~ I love this one! It projects another view of you as a person, as a poet. It comes from your heart and soul. A marvelous tribute to a love, whether that love is real or only a dream. Thank you for making it available to all of us. Again, I feel it is SO important for you to find a way to advance your English language skills. English is the only language I have ever known and I still make my share of errors. But we all need to work on the basis of our efforts which, for any kind of writer, is language. I think this may be more particularly true for poets and poetry because of the nature of this media, this style. The basic content and idea of your poem (She) should earn you at least 4 point on our 1 to 5 scale. The loss of a point is due to errors in language factors. Congratulations! Will