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first she waxed ten

 

there once was a child

went backward in time.

 

first she waxed ten,

then came to nine.

 

I saw her then,

at her age of just nine:

 

she looked awful,

an’ I, blurting, said,

 

from the mouth at the front

of my head,

 

“What’s happened to you?

 

you look terrible for nine,

in my view,

 

I opine.

 

sorry to malign,

but that’s not a a good sign.

 

I distinctly do remember—

 

at the back of my mind

while I peel this fine orange rind—

 

at ten you were fine;

that you looked,

 

as a matter of fact,

then quite divine.”

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purplemoondoll

18 years 8 months ago

Like it!

Especially the rhyming couplets. Spotted one typo - you look terible for nine, Title is intriguimg - is there a story behind this? Nice work - Kaz
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barbsdad2003

18 years 8 months ago

Thank you, thank you!

Post high school I got up to 136 wpm on an IBM Selectric, setting a business-school record for that institution. Learned a soft touch that helped me get over advanced speed hurdles. Although a consequence has come with it. When I press the R twice in a row, the second may not appear. Of course then it's important that I look for (and find) such errors, something I nearly always do. But not quite! As in this case. Regards, Chuck, aka Chuckles
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barbsdad2003

18 years 8 months ago

Incidentally, no

No story behind this piece. Other than giving free rein to a playful imagination. Thanx again, Chuck