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Waiting
Now, When I look into your eyes I see a hollow soul
desperately seeking an escape from your pain
The past holding you hostage inside your own heart.
Leaving you unable to open a window
to catch a refreshing breeze to replace the putrid air
of a long captive past
How you hold onto memories that only cause you pain.
Twisting and turning your insides to leave
what appears to be an empty shell before me
I cannot help but to wonder of the thoughts that go through your mind
So I lightly knock on the door
Noone answers
Leaving me to just catch glimpses of light through a small crack
I, longing to be invited in, wait patiently on your doorstep
I too grow cold
Impatients overcomes me and I want to walk away
but the flickers of light hold me mezmorized to where I stand
Closing my eyes I imagine hearing a beautiful song
waiting for the dance I fear will never come
Yet I still wait
Waiting in the shadows of your yesterdays
Critiques
weirdelf
18 years 10 months ago
oooh, so been there!
JulieMcCarty
18 years 10 months ago
Thanks Jess
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