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fish

your defective to silence me the way you do.
hush, you say
dont want to tumble the only thing that cures this demeaning disease of loves bruise.
come on, enjoy this bedraggled place i found for us
live underneath my abomination to keep me alive and gorge this  everlasting painful blaze
Im sorry i let you inside my heart, just for you to liquidate this not so giving trust.
the pieces are falling, why must it be your way alone.
My toes are crushed and eyes are suffocating from this lack of emotion strait from your relinquished hate.
fit with me
desire consuming me
lost under the sea, shackled with your strong bones
sorrowful fish, to your bait
dialating pupils for you to see.
bastard
hate me for what you caused
lonely and dreary from you screaming faster.
strip my desire to nothing.
till im begging for you to swim naked and bleed.
go, i cant stand this burning
lovers and fighters, we are ultimately doomed.
i still choose to love you, and enjoy your pathetically fearful consume.
donate your overwhelmingly passion
steal it when we get too close.
trepidation controls your sight and breath
Like my ultimate fear and hope of ascending among these dirty fishes in the ocean.
warm me up and control each step.
bridle us
and this precious confusion
despise my feelings you created
ascend all trust
i want to resurrect within your heart, and destroy all timidity you have eloquently baited.
I am the fish.
under the warm water.
this is where we begun, and where it will end
emeralds strung from my soul, dropped dead for you to slaughter
i want to love you, forever in dramatic trends.
Go swim with the fishes coward.
for bringing this upon me, and now i settle upon walking away.
broken from the inside out through my skin and downwardly forward.
as soon as i do, your discomposure will beg me to love you all day
phobia
horror from silent lonelyness
ultimately prepared for presentiment
go away now
this is my sweet revelation

— anonymitylll, Aug 21, 2007

Critiques

Frost Smith

Frost Smith

18 years 10 months ago

I love this theme

I love this theme, and the picture you paint is awesome, the only thing I might suggest is work on your consistancy of flow, maybe some transitions, but thats just me

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