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Time Changes Things

No doubt, that with time comes change

And change takes time

Nothing remains the same

Like the sun shining after the rain

Like a picture without a frame

Like a blind man walking without his cane

Still you must maintain

Like your heart beating without the pain

As you try over and over again

But time won’t make it plain

Which makes you refrain, from it all

Just hope and pray that the change in time

Keeps you sane

So you don’t complain

then you can always see the sun after the rain

And keep your picture in a frame

So that in time

you will see a change

As you thank God for the blessings you claim

 

 

— TONI SEARS, Aug 21, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

this is a bloody excellent poem!

The constant use of the same rhyme could have made this contrived, but you are better than that. You really made it work for what you were saying. Really well written, conceived and powerful. cheers, Jess

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