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White Flag

Can I muster strength for courage

Will I tread these waters true

Can I count my blessings one by one

Have the answers to the clues

Its a hectic day inside again

My umbrella starts to leak

This terror grabs me by the throat

I choke- and I can’t speak!

Can I focus my ways into happier days

With my comfort by my side

Or is it the truth

I must walk through my youth

And not enjoy the ride.

Won’t erase the past

Just know it won’t last

Too long

It keeps me down

Do I just sit and wait

On a special date

Till my unhealed scars are found

Do I have what it takes

To accept my mistakes

Though they haven’t taken me far

Can I string up this flag

Though its all that I have

To a day where my heart deals the cards.

— searchursoul, Aug 20, 2007

Critiques

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TONI SEARS

18 years 10 months ago

white flag

I love your rhyming skillz, and the words you chose to express yourself. The poem is very good keep rhyming tonisearsakasofabulous
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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Excellent

Title reminds me of Dido's song - but this has a better flow and story to tell! love it!

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