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The Voices.

The darkness closes In,In,In

Tantalizing the madness Within,Within,Within

Taking hold of my very Soul,Soul,Soul

Why won’t my mind take Control,Control,Control

Leave me alone I beg go Away,Away,Away

You will listen they hiss to what we Say,Say,Say

I cover my ears but i still hear them in my Head,Head,Head

I would prefer death to this madness Instead,Instead,Instead

I will not listen leave me Alone,Alone,Alone

We will never leave you for we have been Sewn,Sewn,Sewn

You are mistaken I am me and you are You,You,You

If that is true they chant then who are you talking To,To,To?

— diddy, Aug 20, 2007

Critiques

JB

Jillian Botha

18 years 10 months ago

Good effect...

Hi diddy This is good!!! i think the repitition of the last three words in each line, really gives one an idea of how out of control and panicked this person is, and how the person is trying to gain some form of control over these voices and their life (am i getting the correct message here? If not please do let me know...) Thanks for this!! Kind regards Feebie Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)

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