Shadowed Past

Wrap it up in a bow and finito. This was pretty, I dislike rhyming poems because the words sometimes seem forced however this one wasn't bad. Although in some stanzas the words did not do the poem justice; there were probably better synonyms that would have been a better fit. Thanks for the read

The only suggestionI would haveis that the pacing appeared to be a bit off beat in places but in general it flowed well... I enjoyed reading this and the story you are telling. So here I am, years away, fighting desperately to keep the memories at bay, and you just stand there, offering no reason at all, like you’re not ready to say that you were the one at fault. A powerful defiant ending. Nice work - I look forward to seeing more. Kaz

and you made it very clear, despite the forced rhyming, a very good poem of truth. cheers, Jess

Some people never see what they do, not even when its done and over with, all you can do is move on and heal the best you can. I really enjoyed this poem, it was well written. Have a good one

hi Korynthe Having been in this space, this poem spoke to me loud and clear of emotions felt, and hurt experienced at the hands of another, yet there is that burning defiance that remains that "you will not break me down!!!!" Bravo!!!! Many thanks for this read! kind regards Feebie Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)

for your pain Korynthe, I can feel it in this poem. Some people just never realize that there are others in this world. That is why no matter how you try to express your pain to them about a wrong you have been dealt by their hand, they do not acknowledge it or say they are sorry. So arrogant, that some how in their minds they can justify what they have done. I say to you, be strong and work on healing your heart life is to short to waste it on an ignorant person who probably does not care one way or the other. I like this poem but it is sad that not everyone knows how precious their children are and are not smart enough to know that they will need them someday when they are old and unable to care for themselves. Be strong. :) Julie