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O

the black and the grey

 

 

and sometimes monochrome memories

blurry offbeat melodies of colour

circling the page like homing bombers

bellies full of hot perspiration

ready to drop

drip by searing drip

 

pages ripped and loose

plastic frayed and opaque

cataract visage

 

that face was mine a time ago

and then there

that picture not even mine

 

shes smiling out from all those

years    and even though

i know its not me

i swear ive been in her arms

once before

 

my black shortbox ford

my daughter

my women mates in order

my male companions

 

a mountian river

beaneath overcast sky

 

page after worn page

 

time for some music

bartender

and a fine glass of ale

 

put this red cloth book away

ill visit my sins another day

 

to all those

and they

 

here! here!

 

..O..

 

— orgami, Aug 19, 2007

Critiques

washing tears

washing tears

18 years 10 months ago

i like this

i like this because it shows alot of emotion in subtle ways, the careful discriptions are great. this was a fine read Washington Fear
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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Awesome

As always! This is wonderful! circling the page like homing bombers bellies full of hot perspiration ready to drop drip by searing drip Sheer magic! Kaz x
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

The monochrome works well

with your ongoing themes of memory and now. (I suspect part of me is already planning a thesis on your work, sorry, you aren't dead yet! 8) The verse "my black shortbox ford my daughter my women mates in order my male companions" struck me as... incongruous? Maybe you meant it to draw you (us?) back to here and went we afeeiv Tyagresive. I waar, yeiur ece to avoiage repct sbk, You are ntt yout mamyye are afine ot Thr diblt nit acceit hbt ti Love the piece.Yout are a finnf out but you udit brire eyouhr yiu creatr Esoudlly od try. i. cheers, Jess
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Jillian Botha

18 years 10 months ago

here! here!

Hi Orgami "put this red cloth book away ill visit my sins another day" These two line speak volumes to me.... We all do this at one time or another in our lives, when we look back at old letters or photos, whichever the case may be. And amnongst alll of these we all have those "rather be forgotten" memories. I really enjoyed this. Thank you!!! kind regards Feebie Mistakes happen, do not dwell on them, live them, mourn them and move on to better things. (PS: if that does not work eat lots and lots of chocolate)

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