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hidden mists

You are the mist

That clouds my mind

Of pain

That hides truths

Behind a seductive kiss

Addictive love

Feelings I’ve long since imagined

Enough lies

Pride doesn’t hide

But

The mist surrounds me

Engulfs me

i see its haze

In all my directions

In all my dreams and happiness

Forced to breath its stench

 

It smells so good!

 

i choose to exist in this smog

i desire to hide in this unclear haze

In this love

Your beautiful mist.

— SLoEDdie, Aug 19, 2007

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purplemoondoll

18 years 10 months ago

Interesting Poem

Interesting write with some good imagery.. i choose to exist in this smog i desire to hide in this unclear haze In this love Your beautiful mist. Beautiful
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

oooh, I shiver

in delighted and repugnant memory of addicted love, a very evocative piece. cheers, Jess

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