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Long Lost Angel!

Look at me and say "I don’t love you",

And maybe if you say that I would find it true,

And if you do decide to say it please don't mean it,

Because in my eyes us apart I just don’t see it,

Kiss my lips and say you want to leave,

Grab my hand and look at me,

You are just going through a faze,

Please it will be gone in a couple of days,

Wait! Don’t walk so fast I need you,

I want to cater to you and please you,

I cant live like this I have to have you in my life,

I have to be your only number one and wife,

Please I have asked more than twice,

I live for you so if I don’t have you I wont live for me,

This is my letter to you from your long lost angel!!!!!!!

— dat_shady_chick_2007, Aug 19, 2007

Critiques

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TONI SEARS

18 years 10 months ago

Long Lost Angel

shady chick, There was definitely nothing shady about that piece, I thought it was great. Good job,you have a lot of talent. tonisearsakasofabulous
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

You can certainly write!

But I kinda got the feeling this was between you and him/her. I am sure many would disagree. cheers, Jess

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