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~~ A Breeze That Has Wings ~~

 

 

 

It flies and it swirls

all over the world

 

All over the universe,

to the tiny curl of your hair

 

Yes, the breeze it has wings

and it flies like a bird

 

Entwined all around a solid gird,

it circles and it circles

 

So strong it is heard, by everything

it touches

 

The wings of a breeze

leaves nothing untouched

 

— ladywriter, Aug 18, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

I did, thank you.

although the line "Entwined all around a solid gird," struck me at odds. Maybe pushing a bit for the rhyme? The rest made me think of the butterfly in a Beijing garden that affects the hurricane in New York. cheers, Jess

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