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Of Apples and Teeth -- w/respect 4 & apologies 2, Elizabeth Barrett Browning (1806-1861)

 

How

Shall I paint thee?

With sun’s golden rays –

A brush dipped in haunting autumn leaves

And yellow-orange oceans

 

How shall I

Paint thee, thy angles,

Thy symmetry and curves?

 

I shall paint thee

In thy birthplace,

Airborne and heavy

In latticed, sculpted, drooping green branches

 

I shall paint thee,

Perfect and lovely,

God’s most graceful fruit

 

And then I shall paint thee

With my teeth,

In juicy, sharp-edged water colors,

As perfectly eaten,

 

Thy existence at pinnacle,

Thy purpose fulfilled.

— waterdragon, Aug 18, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

They say the mark of true genius

is being able to hide your influences. Well post-modernism gave the poo-poo to that! Beautifully constructed, a work in its own right as well as a respectful reference. cheers, Jess
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LovelArt

18 years 8 months ago

Very good vocabulary skills =]

You have a very good use of words in this poem. I like it, you did really good, I can't wait to read more.
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waterdragon

18 years 8 months ago

Welcome and

thanks! I'll be inviting you to friendship w/me Please read my blogs and other poetry, le'me know whatchu think? Thanks! Look forward to reading your works... Reverend Bec Hudson Shine Your Light It's the ONLY Way to Get Rid of the Darkness!

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