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Love

  Your breath sprays a mist of hot air on my neck
Which tingles my skin cells and makes them crave for more precipitation from you…
(Predictable)
I wake up to your rhythmic nostril melodies and fall in sink with your unique pattern of high notes and low notes as you compose your morning snooze
music
(Irritable)
Your eyes
Beautiful.
Mesmerizing brown mirrors that reflect every glimpse seen with golden  innocence
White hardened dust outlines your deep  chocolate skin
Leaving a ring around your plump sultry lips intwined with black blades of ticklish stubble
And all I can do is smile
I stroke your face, my finger grazes your cheek bone
(did I ever tell you about your lovely bone structure)
Chiseled to perfection
(Unforgettable)
— Word, Aug 18, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Dig this,

intimate and lovely. Clever structure, the bracketed words work well. I wonder if for "sink" you meant "synch" for synchronise? cheers, Jess

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