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O

torn rivers

 

 

waking alive in pre morning light

birds singing exotic trills

my mind thrashing with raw emotion

and burned memories

 

charred and sooty

they cling to my throat like choked tears

 

love fills my eyes

and spills from my hurting chest

 

i cling to my emptiness

and walk the hall of ghosts

hearing their voices soft and soothing

 

seeing them warm and hollow once

more

their touch

their laughter

 

i shiver

and turn over

once more

 

..O..

— orgami, Aug 17, 2007

Critiques

LC

Lenny of Cohen

18 years 10 months ago

Threw

me into a corridor of silent ghosts. The line " my mind thrashing with raw emotion and burned memories " is sublime. Lenny
weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Shiver

you raised some of my old ghosts and feelings. Love beginning and ending, what can we do but turn over once more? cheers, Jess

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