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Tears

Tears

By Alexander Duque

 

Why my tears fall I can never explain.

Might because I’m in such pain.

Tear drops as it falls to my cheek,

Some are bitter and some are sweet.

As I cry in tears I feel so sick.

As lay at night I couldn’t sleep,

Thinking of something deep.

It makes my body so weak,

So I write and fight instead.

A tear flows when I’m in sorrow,

Seems like Ill never see the sun tomorrow.

Emotion I have just couldn’t hide,

Release what I feel inside.

I find my self in tears,

When my heart is torn.

Pain deeply I feel,

She stubs me with a thorn.

My heart beats faster,

As I catch my breath

Vision of darkness,

An early death.

Tears flow when I’m all alone,

An outcast cause I’m on my own.

I’m trembling shaking in fear,

No one care to listen what I feel.

Tears fall when I’m depress,

Tears fall when I’m in stress.

As my tears fall I feel relieved,

Pain was gone, I couldn’t believe.

Why my tears fall, it’s hard to explain.

But after I got a lot to gain.

— onisd23, Aug 17, 2007

Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

18 years 10 months ago

Just my thing, Alexander

but I don't think the rhyming is working for you here. It makes it a bit sing-songy. I like the concepts and ending. cheers, Jess
Mark

Mark

18 years 10 months ago

Nice Alexander

I like this very much. I am sorry you feel so down. Anytime you need to please message me. Tears are the most wonderful thing. You like to rhyme? Keep on practicing it can be frustrating but for me now the rhyme just seems to fall where it needs to, almost on it's own. Cheer up and keep on writing! Mark

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