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a dreamly wish

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a wish i only dream of"

as i wait to the day, to find what i was

here for.

spoken: when i just wonder or know that everyone

will be happy if i was gone.

song: a dreamly wish

as i close my eyes when i sleep

i dream where or what was i here for.

a dream of a young girl like me.

but diffrent a girl who wasn’t so shy or

scared of people.

a girl who was happy not cryin every

single second in her life!!!!
i wonder if i ever will change?

will i be this way my time here on earth?

spoken: everytime i breath i not loved

a girl who was loved every second in her life…..

a dream…. a perfect girl…. that i never…. will

be……

as i sleep i am happy of that girl i just wish i was.

that i will never be…

a girl with no low self extem…

a girl that wasn’t so shy

a girl that was pretty and not heavy set….

a girl that i only dream of that i just wish i can be….

but her with me

when i see my self i am just a ugly werid thing

that girl she was everything i can ecer hope for…

a girl that i wish will take over my life, as i will die.

i know my parents will be happy with that one

girl!!!!! i know everyone will be cause it is true,

i know it be………… i just wish dreamly like i wish i was

that girl………………..

— am i loved, Aug 16, 2007

Critiques

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waterdragon

18 years 10 months ago

Dreams do come true

Dear one, you sound just like I used to be - weird, fat, perceived myself to be quite ugly. Your words weep on the page, painting a very clear, very sad picture. May I recommend HIGHLY that you watch and/or read "The Secret" - it is the number 1 best-selling non-fiction book in the US right now, and the movie is awesome -- it will give you a whole new approach to focussing in on your dreams to bring them easily into reality. Trust me, I've been there, and my heart goes out to you. Please let me know how you do!

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