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AS you look


 

2:As you look

when you look throw me what do you see?

when you look throw my eyes, heart and soul?

you see sorrow.

As you see me

i laugh and smile,but i always a, crying in my heart.

if you see in my mine, u see laughter and smiles, but if

you look throw my heart you see sadnness and sorrow.

AS you look in my eyes you see sorrw, but

what eles can you see?

look close and find that i am crying.

tears of blood down my cheast and in my heart.

a blood tear coming from my heart, shedding throw

with every beat…..

i am crying as we speak of my lifes past,

i am crying as we all know for everything that has happen,

i am crying for the hurt in my soul and heart….

i am crying….

as you look…….

— am i loved, Aug 16, 2007

Critiques

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Conect11

18 years 10 months ago

strong

and meaningful, I applaude the bravery you put forth here. Excellent job. I'm sorry to say you've got some serious spell checking to do, but the point of your poem rung out. Good work Mark

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